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Friday, 30 August 2019

My Essay

For our work for the week we are doing an essay. We have to use all the natural stages for the essay and I'm very excited because I love my writing I haven't finished it yet but I think it is pretty close.

My Essay

Introduction

In the novel'A Long Walk to Water' By Linda Sue Park, a character that I found interesting was a boy called Salva. Throughout the story Salva showed that he was Happy, Hardworking and a Leader but it costed him heaps. He went through many hardships and suffering to get to where he is today. Read on to find out more.

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Salva was especially happy when he got to go to New York. He found a new family and started a new life in the city. He was overwhelmed with joy when he found out his dad was alive and went through heaps of hardships to get to and that brings us to the next subject.

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Salva proved that he was a hard worker in many ways including how he made the project that helped millions of people in south Sudan. He always helped his father and never complained. He helped an old lady without question and managed to survive to go to New York where he made the project. Salva is one of the best role models and is a great leader.

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Salva is a great leader without question, he managed to lead 20,000 CHILDREN across the whole of south Sudan and even managed to make it there. He was responsible and gave all the kids jobs to do to keep them alive all while he was one kid who was scared without his family and didn't know what to do.

Conclusion

Overall Salva is a great person and has helped millions of people survive in south Sudan and is a huge hero in the whole world he has inspired heaps of people around the globe and will always be an iconic hero.

1 comment:

  1. Hi, Drew. you have made a great start here. Next week, we will go through our essays and make sure we have followed the structure. We also need to make sure we have included evidence from the text to support our ideas. You have got some evidence, which is great! We now just need to build on this with more formal language.

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